Heroes Fan Fiction
chapter one
"Missing pieces"
ST Louis, Missouri, USA
In St Louis a young man known as Rowan finds missing links to his past that could destroy the world, As he finds out his father is hiding a secret he should not have revealed.
As Rowan trailed around the park, he bumps into a young man surrounded with black suited men acting as guards, Rowan apologizies only to see the person was Nathan pertrelli. Rowan asks " your Nathan pertrelli aren't you?" Nathan with a smile replies" yes i am and you are?" Rowan eager to see his idol, quickly responds "i'm Rowan, what a surprise, i'm your biggest fan". Nathan nods happily at Rowan and walks off. Rowan surprised to see a senator to be walking the parks of St Louis walks off the opposite direction smiling as he walks.
He looks at his watch, the time was 9:30 am and he was late for class, he runs and runs, suddenly he hovers uncontrollably spinning and gliding over his school, amazingly no one saw him and he whooshed away. After a while he manages to gain control of this power and sails off home. By the time he got to safely, he went home to think how could this have happened, what could this mean?, so many questions, so little answers. Thena knock on the bedroom door broke his concentration
The door opened and suddenly his father came in with a bad grin and said in a soft deep tone "we need to talk!!".
Walking out to the kitchen felt like a knife stabbing me every step, i thought to myself " man he knew i skipped school today, if only i could tell him the truth", His dad lights up a cigarette and tells Rowan " i know you skipped school today son", Rowan scared tries to tell his dad " i was.. um.. goin", his dad interrupts him" i saw you flying today son", Rowan shellshock by his dad's discovery coughs but no excuse came to his mind. "Son i wanted to tell you this for many years now, it's a secret that you must know now" Rowan not fully conprehending what was happening at that moment froze and couldn't speak, his father went on "son you have a power, you can fly but i also have a power, i can control water, i call it hydrokinesis" Rowan watches his father demonstrate spinning water and make unusual shapes with it.
Now you know Rowan, you are special,don't let anyone tell you other wise, Rowan now fully understands this power asks his father "what do i do now?" father went in the closet and got a picture out, "this was you brother Rowan"," you must find him, his in danger", Rowan replies " why haven't you told me this before", a silence came, suddenly the father spoke " i didn't know how to tell you but enough of this talking nonsense, you must help your brother, his in danger!!"
Rowan quickly runs to his room and packs a couple supplies. He opens the window and prepares to find his brother, his father runs up and tells him" go luck son" and waves at him, Rowan waves backa dn jumps out the window and into the sky hoping to find his brother.
Full Version: HEROES SEASON ONE Chapter one "missing pieces"
Neat story so far. 
One fault is that it was hard to read at times. I would recommend getting a Beta reader to help you out with this.
I know BegemontGeroi does that for some writers on here. You can probly PM her and ask.
One fault is that it was hard to read at times. I would recommend getting a Beta reader to help you out with this.
I know BegemontGeroi does that for some writers on here. You can probly PM her and ask.
And if BG is too occupied or anything, I'll volunteer as well. I may not be as good at it as BG, but I'm not too shabby.
Diggin the story so far, btw.
Diggin the story so far, btw.
Heroes fan fiction
chapter two
"lock up"
previously on heroes fan fiction
"i saw you flying today son"
"your brother his in danger"
Border of St Louis, Missouri USA
Flying correctly for the first time made Rowan excited and feelings he could not have every imagined, he spins and flips gliding along with birds until he sees his best friend sitting in the coffee shop knowns as parky's, she was enjoying a coffee with he business work for college, it was next to the park where he met his idol *the Nathan pretrelli*. Rowan feeling guilty leaving without saying good bye flew quietly towards the bushs to avoid detection from other people there, after a safe landing he walked up and put his hand over her eyes and said in a funny tone "guess who?", Sara instantly knew and responded "oh Rowan, your so childish", Rowan laughs and sits down on the chair left of her, Sara now blushing after Rowan touched her made him wonder "what's wrong with her?, is she sick", Sara looks at him and asks " your father told me you were leaving town for a while?, is it true or what?", Rowan not sure what to say about this question tries to lie but Sara always sees right through them, Rowan puts his hand on hers and goes " i..um.. am going on a trip to new york, Sara now goes even more red and stutters a bit saying "wwwwhy?", Rowan quickly regroups and tells her in a sad soft tone "to find my brother", Sara already knew he never had a brother but couldn't pick up the lie from this. She takes her hand away and Rowan leaves, Sara knows he will never return and yells goodbye, Rowan waves and runs to the bus.
After taking the bus to the nearest hotel, he looks at the picture and tries to find clues to his brother whereabouts, at the corner of the photo he sees a name, it said Robert Keep and the picture was taken in costa verde along time ago. Rowan goes on the directory and searches for one Robert Keep in Costa Verde, one entry came up, it said on the directory "Robert Keep, 142 selwood road, New York. Rowan's eyes expand and he smiles, so excited by this find, he runs out of the room and sprints up to the bus stops nearest to him, he waits but no buses came so he walks in the lane way to the airport, he walks and walks but as he gets nearer to the airport, a black van turns on it's headlights and starts to drive, following him, it starts to quicken which sparks Rowan to run. The Van accelerates and hits Rowan on the leg, Rowan collapses and knocks his head on the concrete, blacken out.
When he came to, he saw wires and clips monitoring his vitals and mind status, he tries to free himself but finds that he is tied and banded up from his wrist and legs, he yells for help but to no avail. He suddenly sees a shadowy figure on the corner of his eye, He saw his own reflection on the horn-rimmed glasses the man was wearing, Rowan worried tries to act tough and shouts in anger "i have friends that have contacts, you will be in jail for the rest of your lives, you assaulted me and kidnapped me", The shadowy man laughs and says "Rowan, you have a strange ability, your power is called Dynamic Shapeshifting which allows you to absorb abilities by taking a trait or personality aspect of the original owner of the power. Rowan unsure about what he was talking about struggles and struggles to break free but couldn't, the shadowy figure talks in asly dark tone "don't worry Rowan, you won't remember a thing, my friend here will handle you, Rowan shellshock yells for help but the other man just puts his palm on the forhead of rowan and suddenly black again.
To be continued..
What has happened to rowan, is he dead or alive, fing out on chapter three "the missing memories"
chapter two
"lock up"
previously on heroes fan fiction
"i saw you flying today son"
"your brother his in danger"
Border of St Louis, Missouri USA
Flying correctly for the first time made Rowan excited and feelings he could not have every imagined, he spins and flips gliding along with birds until he sees his best friend sitting in the coffee shop knowns as parky's, she was enjoying a coffee with he business work for college, it was next to the park where he met his idol *the Nathan pretrelli*. Rowan feeling guilty leaving without saying good bye flew quietly towards the bushs to avoid detection from other people there, after a safe landing he walked up and put his hand over her eyes and said in a funny tone "guess who?", Sara instantly knew and responded "oh Rowan, your so childish", Rowan laughs and sits down on the chair left of her, Sara now blushing after Rowan touched her made him wonder "what's wrong with her?, is she sick", Sara looks at him and asks " your father told me you were leaving town for a while?, is it true or what?", Rowan not sure what to say about this question tries to lie but Sara always sees right through them, Rowan puts his hand on hers and goes " i..um.. am going on a trip to new york, Sara now goes even more red and stutters a bit saying "wwwwhy?", Rowan quickly regroups and tells her in a sad soft tone "to find my brother", Sara already knew he never had a brother but couldn't pick up the lie from this. She takes her hand away and Rowan leaves, Sara knows he will never return and yells goodbye, Rowan waves and runs to the bus.
After taking the bus to the nearest hotel, he looks at the picture and tries to find clues to his brother whereabouts, at the corner of the photo he sees a name, it said Robert Keep and the picture was taken in costa verde along time ago. Rowan goes on the directory and searches for one Robert Keep in Costa Verde, one entry came up, it said on the directory "Robert Keep, 142 selwood road, New York. Rowan's eyes expand and he smiles, so excited by this find, he runs out of the room and sprints up to the bus stops nearest to him, he waits but no buses came so he walks in the lane way to the airport, he walks and walks but as he gets nearer to the airport, a black van turns on it's headlights and starts to drive, following him, it starts to quicken which sparks Rowan to run. The Van accelerates and hits Rowan on the leg, Rowan collapses and knocks his head on the concrete, blacken out.
When he came to, he saw wires and clips monitoring his vitals and mind status, he tries to free himself but finds that he is tied and banded up from his wrist and legs, he yells for help but to no avail. He suddenly sees a shadowy figure on the corner of his eye, He saw his own reflection on the horn-rimmed glasses the man was wearing, Rowan worried tries to act tough and shouts in anger "i have friends that have contacts, you will be in jail for the rest of your lives, you assaulted me and kidnapped me", The shadowy man laughs and says "Rowan, you have a strange ability, your power is called Dynamic Shapeshifting which allows you to absorb abilities by taking a trait or personality aspect of the original owner of the power. Rowan unsure about what he was talking about struggles and struggles to break free but couldn't, the shadowy figure talks in asly dark tone "don't worry Rowan, you won't remember a thing, my friend here will handle you, Rowan shellshock yells for help but the other man just puts his palm on the forhead of rowan and suddenly black again.
To be continued..
What has happened to rowan, is he dead or alive, fing out on chapter three "the missing memories"
interesting story. keep up the good work!
Heroes fan fiction
chapter three
"The missing memories"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"don't worry Rowan, you won't remember a thing"
"Robert Keep, my brother"
St Louis park, Missouri USA
As my eye slowly open to the mass light shining towards me, i notice someone nodding and shaking me, saying wake up Rowan, wake up!! i started to come through which suddenly i notice it was Sara yelling at me, i got up with a huge headache and i could hardly hear or see anything. Sara now relieved to see me awake, smiles and out of the blue tells me "where have you been for the last week, the moment i heard those words, i thought what the hell?, but didn't say. I asked her "what do you mean by a week?, i just left to find my brother, i didn't even leave the border". At that precise moment, i looked around and saw where i was, I was back at the park where it all began, my quest to find my brother and to solve my missing pieces in my life.
I got up jumpy and in pain, the noises and the light made my headache unbearable so i ran home to ask my father what is going on with me, is it my new found abilities affecting my memories and bring me this pain in side my head, i need to know what was going on. It was 1:30pm in the afternoon when i got to my house, i ran as fast as i could but couldn't fly due to this headache, I looked at my house and that was when i saw something terribly wrong, the door was open and the house trashed, I walked in scared for my dad but also to see if he was alright, i looked everywhere except the kitchen, i scaled the floor as quiet as an ant until i saw my worst fear.
I saw blood everywhere, on the walls and sinks even on the roof, but this was no ordinary killing, my father laid on the ground flat with his skull cut off and his brain was missing, I started to puke in to the sink which made me puke more from seeing the blood, i cried and cried holding his bloody hand wish it was a dream but it was real. I held his hand for along time until i realised that he was holding a piece of paper saying "SYLAR", i didn't know what it meant but my father want me to know and find this thing.
I ran out sobing and saying "it's not true, it's not true" even tripping and hitting Sara, she goes "Rowan, are you all right, your bleeding a lot", i spoke sobing "itssss..not mineeee, it's my..my..dad's!!", Sara not knowing how to react just hugged me and said nothing. After a few minutes of mourning, Sara called the police, they came instantly, questioning me and Sara constantly asking "have you seen how he looks like?" and "where were you at this time?", this where the memory loss was the big deal. i told them i didn't know but that made them more suspicious of me, they backed of when a FBI agent came up to the local police and said "his telling the truth, leave alone to mourn", i said thanks for the help and asked for his name, he just replies "Matt Parkman, nice to meet you" shaking my hand then walks of to examine the crime, after checked the note again, it seemed to be written not to long ago, i usually wouldn't have notice this but after meeting Matt Parkman, i felt more like a detective than ever, then suddenly out of the blue when i was thinking about Sylar, i started to hear voices, i look around and nobody was saying it but i kept hearing the FBI agents saying "Sylar again, he kills the victims all the same, skull cut off and brain missing.
At that point, i knew why my father wanted me to find this note, he wants me to find this "Sylar" and stop him from killing more people, this was my destiny, to fight for my father, to avenge him.
The fire was burning in his eyes and with that tells Sara goodbye and runs off, He runs and runs until he sees a car, he stops but right in the middle of road, seeing coming to his death, he closes his eyes and prays says "sorry dad, i failed, forgive me. BANG!!
To be continued..
Has Rowan died or does he live!! Find out next time on chapter four "dead or alive".
chapter three
"The missing memories"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"don't worry Rowan, you won't remember a thing"
"Robert Keep, my brother"
St Louis park, Missouri USA
As my eye slowly open to the mass light shining towards me, i notice someone nodding and shaking me, saying wake up Rowan, wake up!! i started to come through which suddenly i notice it was Sara yelling at me, i got up with a huge headache and i could hardly hear or see anything. Sara now relieved to see me awake, smiles and out of the blue tells me "where have you been for the last week, the moment i heard those words, i thought what the hell?, but didn't say. I asked her "what do you mean by a week?, i just left to find my brother, i didn't even leave the border". At that precise moment, i looked around and saw where i was, I was back at the park where it all began, my quest to find my brother and to solve my missing pieces in my life.
I got up jumpy and in pain, the noises and the light made my headache unbearable so i ran home to ask my father what is going on with me, is it my new found abilities affecting my memories and bring me this pain in side my head, i need to know what was going on. It was 1:30pm in the afternoon when i got to my house, i ran as fast as i could but couldn't fly due to this headache, I looked at my house and that was when i saw something terribly wrong, the door was open and the house trashed, I walked in scared for my dad but also to see if he was alright, i looked everywhere except the kitchen, i scaled the floor as quiet as an ant until i saw my worst fear.
I saw blood everywhere, on the walls and sinks even on the roof, but this was no ordinary killing, my father laid on the ground flat with his skull cut off and his brain was missing, I started to puke in to the sink which made me puke more from seeing the blood, i cried and cried holding his bloody hand wish it was a dream but it was real. I held his hand for along time until i realised that he was holding a piece of paper saying "SYLAR", i didn't know what it meant but my father want me to know and find this thing.
I ran out sobing and saying "it's not true, it's not true" even tripping and hitting Sara, she goes "Rowan, are you all right, your bleeding a lot", i spoke sobing "itssss..not mineeee, it's my..my..dad's!!", Sara not knowing how to react just hugged me and said nothing. After a few minutes of mourning, Sara called the police, they came instantly, questioning me and Sara constantly asking "have you seen how he looks like?" and "where were you at this time?", this where the memory loss was the big deal. i told them i didn't know but that made them more suspicious of me, they backed of when a FBI agent came up to the local police and said "his telling the truth, leave alone to mourn", i said thanks for the help and asked for his name, he just replies "Matt Parkman, nice to meet you" shaking my hand then walks of to examine the crime, after checked the note again, it seemed to be written not to long ago, i usually wouldn't have notice this but after meeting Matt Parkman, i felt more like a detective than ever, then suddenly out of the blue when i was thinking about Sylar, i started to hear voices, i look around and nobody was saying it but i kept hearing the FBI agents saying "Sylar again, he kills the victims all the same, skull cut off and brain missing.
At that point, i knew why my father wanted me to find this note, he wants me to find this "Sylar" and stop him from killing more people, this was my destiny, to fight for my father, to avenge him.
The fire was burning in his eyes and with that tells Sara goodbye and runs off, He runs and runs until he sees a car, he stops but right in the middle of road, seeing coming to his death, he closes his eyes and prays says "sorry dad, i failed, forgive me. BANG!!
To be continued..
Has Rowan died or does he live!! Find out next time on chapter four "dead or alive".
Nice story. Keep it up. I can't wait for chapter 4 "Dead or alive" 
can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work!
Heroes fan fiction
chapter four
"dead or alive"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"Rowan, are you all right?, your bleeding a lot"
"SYLAR"
St Louis road, Missouri USA
BANG!!, the wind blew at me, i felt air brush against my face, no impact against my head, it was strange, i opened my eyes to see a man single handedly stop the car. i couldn't believe my eyes, he dropped the car and turned around, i looked up to see him put out his hand and helped me up, i said in a gently tone "thanks for saving me sir, may i know your name please?", he instantly turned around showing a scar on his face which made me take a step back, he tells me in a darkened tone "my name is Peter pretrelli and i'm from the future, i have to tell you something". My face turned pale and my body didn't move, i couldn't fully digest this information i just got, so i asked "why do you want to talk to me, do you have information about my brother?", peter gave me a stare and i stared back, this silence was very deep and dark like talking to your own murderer about death, he responded back "in the future, i explode in kirby plaza, you and your brother are the only people that can stop me!!".
I quickly responded "you know my brother?", he tells me "he was my best friend in the future, he was killed by Sylar", the moment i heard that name "SYLAR", i almost exploded, he saw the anger on my face and tried to relax me, putting his hand on my shoulder saying in a saddened voice "i know how you feel Rowan but you can stop this from happening at all!!", the moment he said i could stop Robert from being like my father gave me a glow, i asked him in a more enthusastic voice "how do i stop this Sylar?", Peter gives me a grin and said "you go to New York and find a scientist named Mr Mohinder Suresh, he should tell you everything about Sylar OK?", i was about to take off but something in my mind wanted to know this, i asked Peter "do you know what my power is?", Peter replies saying "yes Rowan i know", he tells me my power was known in the future as "Dynamic shapshifting" and it allows me to take others abilities by taken a trait like scars or personality aspects of the person, now understand how it works, i tried to copy Peter, when i did i got a scar right on my face just like peter, peter looks at me and said "you have my powers now, you can stop Sylar" and with that disappeared in thin air.
Now feeling confident and energetic, Rowan leaps and starts flying, In a flash he was in New York, Now knowing what his ability is made him feel powerful and with that starts searching New York. He waves his hand out for a taxi, a cab stops and Rowan gets in, Aindian man tells Rowan "hello, where to my friend?", i looked up the address and told the driver " um...142 Selwood Road please" and with that he started driving. With my newly found detective skills, i looked around the cab and saw the name, it said "Mohinder Suresh", at that point i knew was the man Peter was talking about, i asked him "are you a scientist or something?", he looked at me suspiciously but answered "yes, why do you ask", i in reply said "do you know a man named Sylar?", Mohinder gave me a stare of suspicion but continued driving, he asked "do you really want to know?", i responded "yes i really need to know!!". He stopped the cab and turned around, he starts talking about a tape of a man who could extraordinary things but he also told me about his father and how he Sylar killed him, then in return, i told him how Sylar killed my father and that we both have some common ground here. He drove to Robert's house and parked out side it, i asked him "how much Mohinder?" and he said "No charge" and left, i waved and walked up the driveway, i was shaking but also excited to meet my brother, this was it, my destiny!!
to be continued..
Who is Robert and what is his power, find out on chapter five "family or foe".
chapter four
"dead or alive"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"Rowan, are you all right?, your bleeding a lot"
"SYLAR"
St Louis road, Missouri USA
BANG!!, the wind blew at me, i felt air brush against my face, no impact against my head, it was strange, i opened my eyes to see a man single handedly stop the car. i couldn't believe my eyes, he dropped the car and turned around, i looked up to see him put out his hand and helped me up, i said in a gently tone "thanks for saving me sir, may i know your name please?", he instantly turned around showing a scar on his face which made me take a step back, he tells me in a darkened tone "my name is Peter pretrelli and i'm from the future, i have to tell you something". My face turned pale and my body didn't move, i couldn't fully digest this information i just got, so i asked "why do you want to talk to me, do you have information about my brother?", peter gave me a stare and i stared back, this silence was very deep and dark like talking to your own murderer about death, he responded back "in the future, i explode in kirby plaza, you and your brother are the only people that can stop me!!".
I quickly responded "you know my brother?", he tells me "he was my best friend in the future, he was killed by Sylar", the moment i heard that name "SYLAR", i almost exploded, he saw the anger on my face and tried to relax me, putting his hand on my shoulder saying in a saddened voice "i know how you feel Rowan but you can stop this from happening at all!!", the moment he said i could stop Robert from being like my father gave me a glow, i asked him in a more enthusastic voice "how do i stop this Sylar?", Peter gives me a grin and said "you go to New York and find a scientist named Mr Mohinder Suresh, he should tell you everything about Sylar OK?", i was about to take off but something in my mind wanted to know this, i asked Peter "do you know what my power is?", Peter replies saying "yes Rowan i know", he tells me my power was known in the future as "Dynamic shapshifting" and it allows me to take others abilities by taken a trait like scars or personality aspects of the person, now understand how it works, i tried to copy Peter, when i did i got a scar right on my face just like peter, peter looks at me and said "you have my powers now, you can stop Sylar" and with that disappeared in thin air.
Now feeling confident and energetic, Rowan leaps and starts flying, In a flash he was in New York, Now knowing what his ability is made him feel powerful and with that starts searching New York. He waves his hand out for a taxi, a cab stops and Rowan gets in, Aindian man tells Rowan "hello, where to my friend?", i looked up the address and told the driver " um...142 Selwood Road please" and with that he started driving. With my newly found detective skills, i looked around the cab and saw the name, it said "Mohinder Suresh", at that point i knew was the man Peter was talking about, i asked him "are you a scientist or something?", he looked at me suspiciously but answered "yes, why do you ask", i in reply said "do you know a man named Sylar?", Mohinder gave me a stare of suspicion but continued driving, he asked "do you really want to know?", i responded "yes i really need to know!!". He stopped the cab and turned around, he starts talking about a tape of a man who could extraordinary things but he also told me about his father and how he Sylar killed him, then in return, i told him how Sylar killed my father and that we both have some common ground here. He drove to Robert's house and parked out side it, i asked him "how much Mohinder?" and he said "No charge" and left, i waved and walked up the driveway, i was shaking but also excited to meet my brother, this was it, my destiny!!
to be continued..
Who is Robert and what is his power, find out on chapter five "family or foe".
Heroes fan fiction
chapter five
"family or foe"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"I'm Peter Pretrelli, i'm from the future"
"how do i stop Sylar?"
142 Selwood Road, New York USAAs i started to walk up the driveway towards the door, it felt hard and heavy every step i took, i was think about what to say, what to do after what i have said and how he would react, i pondered and thought "does he even know i exist?", i was scared but this was for the future, for Peter. I took a deep breath and knocked on the door, someone was walking up the hallway then all of a sudden the door opened, i stared at him and asked in a shaken shy voice "areee..you Robert Keep?", he looked at me and said "yes and how can i help you?", now this was the hard part, trying to explain powers and to save the world was a bit extreme but he had to know. Robert, listen to what i have say even if you don'r believe any of it ok?", he looked at me as if was crazy but i kept going " i am your missing brother, i've been looking for you for weeks, i don't how to prove it to you but this a picture of you and your name is at the bottom corner", Robert went red then he started to fall over, i grabbed him before he fell and helped him inside the house. While he was knocked out, ilooked around the house to see how he has lived, using my detective skills, i saw that he lived alone with no children or girlfriend, he likes to skydive but hasn't done it for about five years. He started to come through so i helped him up and got him a cup of water, he looks at me and said in a weird tone "are you serious about what you told me?!!", i said i was and he just sat there shocked.
After a few minutes of silence, he asked me "do you have a power that nobody else can do?", i respond in a excited tone "yes, it is called Dynamic Shapeshifting!!, can you do the same as i can?", Robert tells Rowan "no but i can do this!!", suddenly out of no where, he gets a knife from the kitchen and was about to cut his wrist, i tried to stop him but he told me to back off, i sat watching then as he cut himself, he didn't get hurt but the knife started to bend and suddenly it completely bent. My jaw dropped and i asked him "how did you do that?", he said in a happy tone "i call this inpenetrable skin", i said "see you are my brother, you can do something nobody else can do" and with that they talked for hours about life and even at the end exchange numbers.
Rowan also told him about Peter and the plan to stop New York from getting destroyed, Robert understood and decided to help, Rowan asked if he knew anyone that could help us, Robert told Rowan "i know someone who knows someone that can help us, his name is Bennett, Noah Bennett", Rowan asks "what can this Bennett do?", Robert replied "he works for this company that helps people like us and maybe even this bomb situation!!", Rowan, happy about his brother's understanding smiles and hugs his brother tightly and tells Robert "i love you", Robert smiles and says the same.
At 8:30pm, Robert packed some things in to his backpack and told Rowan to wait in the car, Robert calls Noah telling him he needs to talk, Noah tells Robert to meet him at 21st street outside the fruit markets, Robert agrees and hangs up. Roberts runs to the car and tells Rowan "don't worry Rowan, we'll save the world, you can count on me!!" and at that time starts driving and heads of to meet this mysterious Noah Bennett.
To be continued..
Who is this Noah, is he friend or foe, find out in chapter six "deadly confrontation"
chapter five
"family or foe"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"I'm Peter Pretrelli, i'm from the future"
"how do i stop Sylar?"
142 Selwood Road, New York USAAs i started to walk up the driveway towards the door, it felt hard and heavy every step i took, i was think about what to say, what to do after what i have said and how he would react, i pondered and thought "does he even know i exist?", i was scared but this was for the future, for Peter. I took a deep breath and knocked on the door, someone was walking up the hallway then all of a sudden the door opened, i stared at him and asked in a shaken shy voice "areee..you Robert Keep?", he looked at me and said "yes and how can i help you?", now this was the hard part, trying to explain powers and to save the world was a bit extreme but he had to know. Robert, listen to what i have say even if you don'r believe any of it ok?", he looked at me as if was crazy but i kept going " i am your missing brother, i've been looking for you for weeks, i don't how to prove it to you but this a picture of you and your name is at the bottom corner", Robert went red then he started to fall over, i grabbed him before he fell and helped him inside the house. While he was knocked out, ilooked around the house to see how he has lived, using my detective skills, i saw that he lived alone with no children or girlfriend, he likes to skydive but hasn't done it for about five years. He started to come through so i helped him up and got him a cup of water, he looks at me and said in a weird tone "are you serious about what you told me?!!", i said i was and he just sat there shocked.
After a few minutes of silence, he asked me "do you have a power that nobody else can do?", i respond in a excited tone "yes, it is called Dynamic Shapeshifting!!, can you do the same as i can?", Robert tells Rowan "no but i can do this!!", suddenly out of no where, he gets a knife from the kitchen and was about to cut his wrist, i tried to stop him but he told me to back off, i sat watching then as he cut himself, he didn't get hurt but the knife started to bend and suddenly it completely bent. My jaw dropped and i asked him "how did you do that?", he said in a happy tone "i call this inpenetrable skin", i said "see you are my brother, you can do something nobody else can do" and with that they talked for hours about life and even at the end exchange numbers.
Rowan also told him about Peter and the plan to stop New York from getting destroyed, Robert understood and decided to help, Rowan asked if he knew anyone that could help us, Robert told Rowan "i know someone who knows someone that can help us, his name is Bennett, Noah Bennett", Rowan asks "what can this Bennett do?", Robert replied "he works for this company that helps people like us and maybe even this bomb situation!!", Rowan, happy about his brother's understanding smiles and hugs his brother tightly and tells Robert "i love you", Robert smiles and says the same.
At 8:30pm, Robert packed some things in to his backpack and told Rowan to wait in the car, Robert calls Noah telling him he needs to talk, Noah tells Robert to meet him at 21st street outside the fruit markets, Robert agrees and hangs up. Roberts runs to the car and tells Rowan "don't worry Rowan, we'll save the world, you can count on me!!" and at that time starts driving and heads of to meet this mysterious Noah Bennett.
To be continued..
Who is this Noah, is he friend or foe, find out in chapter six "deadly confrontation"
From what I've read, I do like this story -- but you do need an editor/beta-reader.
Hit me up with a PM before you post your next part, if you want. I tend to have a pretty good turnaround editing-wise unless I'm bogged down with schoolwork or not feeling well.
Hit me up with a PM before you post your next part, if you want. I tend to have a pretty good turnaround editing-wise unless I'm bogged down with schoolwork or not feeling well.
Heroes fan fiction
chapter six
"deadly confrontation"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"yes, i call it Dynamic Shapeshifting"
"Inpenetrable skin"
21st street, New York USA
As we made our way to 21st, i was exicted to finally have a straight forward plan, if Peter was here, he would of been pleased with me. Robert and i stopped the car and got off, we waited to see if Noah would turn up or not, so as we waited, we saw a black car drive past us then suddenly halted and a tall man came out, he walked towards us. Robert tells me "that's him, the man i was talking about, Noah!", i looked and suddenly i started to remember things, those glasses, i said to myself then it hit me, he was the guy who attacked me back in St Louis, the man with the horn-rimmed glasses, i ran holding Robert but he wouldn't move so i tried to shoot lightening at Noah but none of my powers were working, Noah starts to smile at me and with the same line "your powers won't work with my friend here" and with that a man came out and stared at me intensely, he started to wobble then he fell to his knees suudenly Noah paniced and grabbed a tazer, i used my regained telekinesis and knocked the tazer out of his hand, i used lightening to shock Noah and he collapsed on the ground. I told Robert "let's get out of here!" then suddenly Robert said "no Rowan, you not going anywhere", i looked stunned but out of nowhere, he pulls out a tazer and shoots me, i yelled in pain but no one came to my aid, as i closed my eyes, falling in to a deep sleep, i saw Robert change his looks and with my last words said "who are you?", she replies "i'm Candice, don't worry, you will be with your brother very soon".
As i woke up, i found i was in a cell with a big glass window and a door, the walls were made od concrete and it somehow surpressed my powers, i looked for an exit but it was made to keep me in. The lights suddenly turned on and Noah was standing there "welcome to level two Rowan, this is where you will be for the rest of your life" he told me, now in fury, i hit the glass and yelled "where is Robert and what have you done with him?", he grins at me and tells me "his on the cell next to you, it's pretty funny isn't it?", i got really mad and tried to hit him but with my powers surpressed, i didn't have the strength. As Noah walked away, he asked a girl to deliver my meals to me, she was blonde and was always confident, she got my food and walked up to my cell, as she opened the door, i heard her laugh and giggle talking to herself. She walks in and introduces herself to me "hi there, you must be Rowan, i'm Elle and i will feed you everyday until you are died, Ok?", as she said those words, i knew i didn't have a choice of saying no so i said yes. She gives me the food and i ate it, it was dry and had no flavour, the water felt dirty but looked clean, it must of been the feeling of being in jail, everything in jail was dirty, i waited until she left so could figure a way out, i looked for cracks or broken bits of pipe to escape but i found none, maybe if i had my detective skills i could.
After afew days of cell life, i started to feel claustraphobic and want to go out and fly, breathing in the fresh air with the birds but these people seemed to make sure i never leave this place, so i decided to make a plan to get out but if it was going to come to life, i needed a time where nobody but Elle was around. As i heard Elle come in, i sat quietly hoping it would work, she walked in and said in a happy tone "hi cutie, ready for lunch?", using my nicest voice replied "yes Elle, i'm starving", she smiles and watches me eat, i asked "do you want to sit down?", she tells me "yeah sure cutie" and sits next to me. She asks me "do you want to play a game?", she smiles and looks at me, i said in a sexie tone "sure babie, why not?", as she pulled her hand out she told me to pull out mine and touch fingertip with fingertip so i did and suddenly she shocked me and i fell back, she laughs but i got mad but this made my plan work better. I got up and said "let's do it again", she nodds laughing and puts her hand on mine, as she was about to shock me, i got my cup and smashed it against her head, she fell unconcious andlied on the floor, the door was left open and it was time to escape.
I ran outside to see if there were any gaurds around, i saw none so i looked next door to my cell and saw a man all tied up with wires attached, this reminded me when Noah took me and wired me up, i got mad and telekinetically shattered the glass, i ran in to Robert's cell and woke him up, he goes "who are you?", in a weak voice, i told him "don't worry Robert, i'm here to help you" so we both ran and ran until we saw an exit, we got outside and saw cars parked all along the area, i broke in the van but didn't have the keys, Robert goes "let me drive" and so i let him, he touched the car and suddenly it started the engine, we both were happy to be out of those cells and were drove off hoping never to be in those cells again. I looked at Robert and asked him "do you know who i am Robert?", he looks at me and says "yeah Rowan, i know who you are", i looked surprised and said "your my brother right?", he looks at me and tells me "yeah, i've been looking for you for months now". He stops the car and tells me "Peter told me to look for you, he said we need to stop him from exploding!".
To be continued..
Robert knows everything, what will happen next, find out on chapter seven "how to stop an exploding man"
chapter six
"deadly confrontation"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"yes, i call it Dynamic Shapeshifting"
"Inpenetrable skin"
21st street, New York USA
As we made our way to 21st, i was exicted to finally have a straight forward plan, if Peter was here, he would of been pleased with me. Robert and i stopped the car and got off, we waited to see if Noah would turn up or not, so as we waited, we saw a black car drive past us then suddenly halted and a tall man came out, he walked towards us. Robert tells me "that's him, the man i was talking about, Noah!", i looked and suddenly i started to remember things, those glasses, i said to myself then it hit me, he was the guy who attacked me back in St Louis, the man with the horn-rimmed glasses, i ran holding Robert but he wouldn't move so i tried to shoot lightening at Noah but none of my powers were working, Noah starts to smile at me and with the same line "your powers won't work with my friend here" and with that a man came out and stared at me intensely, he started to wobble then he fell to his knees suudenly Noah paniced and grabbed a tazer, i used my regained telekinesis and knocked the tazer out of his hand, i used lightening to shock Noah and he collapsed on the ground. I told Robert "let's get out of here!" then suddenly Robert said "no Rowan, you not going anywhere", i looked stunned but out of nowhere, he pulls out a tazer and shoots me, i yelled in pain but no one came to my aid, as i closed my eyes, falling in to a deep sleep, i saw Robert change his looks and with my last words said "who are you?", she replies "i'm Candice, don't worry, you will be with your brother very soon".
As i woke up, i found i was in a cell with a big glass window and a door, the walls were made od concrete and it somehow surpressed my powers, i looked for an exit but it was made to keep me in. The lights suddenly turned on and Noah was standing there "welcome to level two Rowan, this is where you will be for the rest of your life" he told me, now in fury, i hit the glass and yelled "where is Robert and what have you done with him?", he grins at me and tells me "his on the cell next to you, it's pretty funny isn't it?", i got really mad and tried to hit him but with my powers surpressed, i didn't have the strength. As Noah walked away, he asked a girl to deliver my meals to me, she was blonde and was always confident, she got my food and walked up to my cell, as she opened the door, i heard her laugh and giggle talking to herself. She walks in and introduces herself to me "hi there, you must be Rowan, i'm Elle and i will feed you everyday until you are died, Ok?", as she said those words, i knew i didn't have a choice of saying no so i said yes. She gives me the food and i ate it, it was dry and had no flavour, the water felt dirty but looked clean, it must of been the feeling of being in jail, everything in jail was dirty, i waited until she left so could figure a way out, i looked for cracks or broken bits of pipe to escape but i found none, maybe if i had my detective skills i could.
After afew days of cell life, i started to feel claustraphobic and want to go out and fly, breathing in the fresh air with the birds but these people seemed to make sure i never leave this place, so i decided to make a plan to get out but if it was going to come to life, i needed a time where nobody but Elle was around. As i heard Elle come in, i sat quietly hoping it would work, she walked in and said in a happy tone "hi cutie, ready for lunch?", using my nicest voice replied "yes Elle, i'm starving", she smiles and watches me eat, i asked "do you want to sit down?", she tells me "yeah sure cutie" and sits next to me. She asks me "do you want to play a game?", she smiles and looks at me, i said in a sexie tone "sure babie, why not?", as she pulled her hand out she told me to pull out mine and touch fingertip with fingertip so i did and suddenly she shocked me and i fell back, she laughs but i got mad but this made my plan work better. I got up and said "let's do it again", she nodds laughing and puts her hand on mine, as she was about to shock me, i got my cup and smashed it against her head, she fell unconcious andlied on the floor, the door was left open and it was time to escape.
I ran outside to see if there were any gaurds around, i saw none so i looked next door to my cell and saw a man all tied up with wires attached, this reminded me when Noah took me and wired me up, i got mad and telekinetically shattered the glass, i ran in to Robert's cell and woke him up, he goes "who are you?", in a weak voice, i told him "don't worry Robert, i'm here to help you" so we both ran and ran until we saw an exit, we got outside and saw cars parked all along the area, i broke in the van but didn't have the keys, Robert goes "let me drive" and so i let him, he touched the car and suddenly it started the engine, we both were happy to be out of those cells and were drove off hoping never to be in those cells again. I looked at Robert and asked him "do you know who i am Robert?", he looks at me and says "yeah Rowan, i know who you are", i looked surprised and said "your my brother right?", he looks at me and tells me "yeah, i've been looking for you for months now". He stops the car and tells me "Peter told me to look for you, he said we need to stop him from exploding!".
To be continued..
Robert knows everything, what will happen next, find out on chapter seven "how to stop an exploding man"
Heroes fan fiction
chapter seven
"how to stop an exploding man"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"lets do it again"
"Peter told me to look for you, he said we need to stop him from exploding"
Somewhere in New York USA
As Robert told me about Peter and how he was also told to do this mission, we had a instant bond which were like brothers, i felt like we had always knew each other for a life time. Robert asked me "are you like me?", I replied "you mean like special powers, right?", he nodds and i showed him my countless abilities which shocked him, as he watched closely, i asked him "do you have a power?", he looks at me and suddenly lights a flame from his hands just like me. I was happy to see him having the same ability that i had, it made us seem closer then ever, he tells me about his power "my power Rowan is visual mimicry, i can copy abilities as long as i have seen it used before like your fire i just demonstrated", knowing this, me and Robert's powers were very alike.
After a while chatting about our lives, Robert started the engine and drove, he told me he knew a friend that could help but was hard to find, Robert starts talking "this friend of mine also is special like us but has a strange ability, she can control your five senses such touch, smell, see, hear and taste", i wondered if she can make me taste chocolate but this wasn't time for jokes, New York and millions of lives depends on us stopping Peter from self detonation. We drove until we got to Kirby Plaza where Robert ran to a pay phone and made a call, i went to the toliet and washed my face only to see a man in a hat and overcoat looking at me, i asked "aahh, do you want something?", he looks at me and goes "i want to see how that power of yours works!!", he flicks his finger and i hit the wall hard, he picks his fingers up and starts to move it across my forehead then i felt this cutting against my skull. I scream but he kept slicing me suddenly he stops and looks at me weirdly, he saw that i was healing and he seemed shocked so with this distraction i flicked my finger and threw him to the mirrors and i made a brake for it.
By the time i got outside, Robert had finished his call, he looks at me and sees blood, he asks me "why do you have blood on you?", i told him "there was this guy who started to cut my head and with this in mind, i remember that this was how my father died, i got made then my hands started glowing, Robert looked at me and said in terror "whhattt is thhatt?, i told him "i feel like i'm going to explode, RUN!!", as i yelled those words out Robert ran to the car and drove away. I ran into a dark lane way behind Kirby Plaza trying to control the light from my palms, then all of the noise went silent and everyone stopped moving, it felt like time had stopped, i turned around seeing a asian man with a sword looking at me and he tells me "don't worry Rowan, i will save you!!" and with this message, he puts his hand on me and we both disappear.
As we returned to the earth, i felt like i would be sick going somewhere else so quick, i turned around again and saw him, he introduces himself "hello Rowan, My name is Hiro nakamura and i'm from the future", i looked at him and saw peter's image beside him, they were alike, both ruthless in saving the world and others. After hearing this information, i just realised that my hands are still glowing and i couldn't make it go away, Hiro goes "just surppress it as much as you can, i will handle the rest. I held my hands together and made the light weaker than suddenly a young boy comes and hold my hand, he takes a deep breath then starts to drain my light from my hands, it felt like a whoosh sucking out all the bad in me, then as he let go the light was gone. The boy bows and runs off to the shadows, Hiro helps me up and asks me "Rowan, you know you were going to kill alot of people just then, that is why i brought you to the future, i will teach you to use all your powers correctly and how fight the evil in your time. Hiro gets some pictures of people that are in trouble, he shows me a picture of Issac Mendez and Claire Bennett, he told me i have to save this two because these people will hold the key for the survival of the infamous SYLAR.
After a long lecture about the five years that have gone past, i realised that i needed to fully understand the power i have and to use it for the greater good, Hiro shows me all the powers i have and how to use them, he told me to control my temper even if i see Sylar so i obeyed his rules and learnt everything about me.
After hours and hours of training, i got full control of all my abilities and tested them, i could shoot fire, lightening and telekinesis, i could control my explosive power and could go invisible and fly too, i could use up to eight powers at one time and felt very powerful. After the lesson, i asked Hiro "what happens to me and my brother now in the future?", Hiro looks at me and says in a sad tone "you both died in the 2010 mass extermination of our kind", i was saddened by this news and felt angry, hiro spoke "this is why you must change the future Rowan, to save us all!!", and with that i waved at Hiro and said "don't worry, i will save the world and change this future" and with that Hiro waved back and i teleported back to the present day.
I yelled in a strong tone " i will save you New York" and evryone looked at me but i didn't care, i saw Robert driving his car back to Kirby Plaza and he ran up to me, he tells me in a sad voice "i'm so sorry for abandoning you brother, i was just in a bit of shock, that's all", i pat him in the shoulder and told him "don't worry, i knew you would come back for me" and with that we both smiled and hugged each other like family. After a long embrace, we got to the car and remembered to look for people we must save, the first was a college girl named Claire Bennett, it said on the paper that she could heal so without hesitation, Robert started the engine and we headed for Unions wells high and to save the world.
To be continued..
can Robert and Rowan save Claire, find out next time on chapter eight "homecoming"
chapter seven
"how to stop an exploding man"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"lets do it again"
"Peter told me to look for you, he said we need to stop him from exploding"
Somewhere in New York USA
As Robert told me about Peter and how he was also told to do this mission, we had a instant bond which were like brothers, i felt like we had always knew each other for a life time. Robert asked me "are you like me?", I replied "you mean like special powers, right?", he nodds and i showed him my countless abilities which shocked him, as he watched closely, i asked him "do you have a power?", he looks at me and suddenly lights a flame from his hands just like me. I was happy to see him having the same ability that i had, it made us seem closer then ever, he tells me about his power "my power Rowan is visual mimicry, i can copy abilities as long as i have seen it used before like your fire i just demonstrated", knowing this, me and Robert's powers were very alike.
After a while chatting about our lives, Robert started the engine and drove, he told me he knew a friend that could help but was hard to find, Robert starts talking "this friend of mine also is special like us but has a strange ability, she can control your five senses such touch, smell, see, hear and taste", i wondered if she can make me taste chocolate but this wasn't time for jokes, New York and millions of lives depends on us stopping Peter from self detonation. We drove until we got to Kirby Plaza where Robert ran to a pay phone and made a call, i went to the toliet and washed my face only to see a man in a hat and overcoat looking at me, i asked "aahh, do you want something?", he looks at me and goes "i want to see how that power of yours works!!", he flicks his finger and i hit the wall hard, he picks his fingers up and starts to move it across my forehead then i felt this cutting against my skull. I scream but he kept slicing me suddenly he stops and looks at me weirdly, he saw that i was healing and he seemed shocked so with this distraction i flicked my finger and threw him to the mirrors and i made a brake for it.
By the time i got outside, Robert had finished his call, he looks at me and sees blood, he asks me "why do you have blood on you?", i told him "there was this guy who started to cut my head and with this in mind, i remember that this was how my father died, i got made then my hands started glowing, Robert looked at me and said in terror "whhattt is thhatt?, i told him "i feel like i'm going to explode, RUN!!", as i yelled those words out Robert ran to the car and drove away. I ran into a dark lane way behind Kirby Plaza trying to control the light from my palms, then all of the noise went silent and everyone stopped moving, it felt like time had stopped, i turned around seeing a asian man with a sword looking at me and he tells me "don't worry Rowan, i will save you!!" and with this message, he puts his hand on me and we both disappear.
As we returned to the earth, i felt like i would be sick going somewhere else so quick, i turned around again and saw him, he introduces himself "hello Rowan, My name is Hiro nakamura and i'm from the future", i looked at him and saw peter's image beside him, they were alike, both ruthless in saving the world and others. After hearing this information, i just realised that my hands are still glowing and i couldn't make it go away, Hiro goes "just surppress it as much as you can, i will handle the rest. I held my hands together and made the light weaker than suddenly a young boy comes and hold my hand, he takes a deep breath then starts to drain my light from my hands, it felt like a whoosh sucking out all the bad in me, then as he let go the light was gone. The boy bows and runs off to the shadows, Hiro helps me up and asks me "Rowan, you know you were going to kill alot of people just then, that is why i brought you to the future, i will teach you to use all your powers correctly and how fight the evil in your time. Hiro gets some pictures of people that are in trouble, he shows me a picture of Issac Mendez and Claire Bennett, he told me i have to save this two because these people will hold the key for the survival of the infamous SYLAR.
After a long lecture about the five years that have gone past, i realised that i needed to fully understand the power i have and to use it for the greater good, Hiro shows me all the powers i have and how to use them, he told me to control my temper even if i see Sylar so i obeyed his rules and learnt everything about me.
After hours and hours of training, i got full control of all my abilities and tested them, i could shoot fire, lightening and telekinesis, i could control my explosive power and could go invisible and fly too, i could use up to eight powers at one time and felt very powerful. After the lesson, i asked Hiro "what happens to me and my brother now in the future?", Hiro looks at me and says in a sad tone "you both died in the 2010 mass extermination of our kind", i was saddened by this news and felt angry, hiro spoke "this is why you must change the future Rowan, to save us all!!", and with that i waved at Hiro and said "don't worry, i will save the world and change this future" and with that Hiro waved back and i teleported back to the present day.
I yelled in a strong tone " i will save you New York" and evryone looked at me but i didn't care, i saw Robert driving his car back to Kirby Plaza and he ran up to me, he tells me in a sad voice "i'm so sorry for abandoning you brother, i was just in a bit of shock, that's all", i pat him in the shoulder and told him "don't worry, i knew you would come back for me" and with that we both smiled and hugged each other like family. After a long embrace, we got to the car and remembered to look for people we must save, the first was a college girl named Claire Bennett, it said on the paper that she could heal so without hesitation, Robert started the engine and we headed for Unions wells high and to save the world.
To be continued..
can Robert and Rowan save Claire, find out next time on chapter eight "homecoming"
Heroes fan fiction
chapter eight
"homecoming"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"Rowan, you know you were going to kill a lot of people just then"
"i will save you New York"
Union wells high, Odessa Texas, USA
As we approached Union wells high, i felt like we saved the world, it was 8:08pm and it was homecoming. i looked everywhere for her but found no clue so i went inside to see if she was getting dressed for the prom or a dance, i ran until i saw a cabinet of pictures saying a girl named jackie ran in the fire and saved a man but Hiro told me Claire could heal so i knew it was wrong.
As i checked the area i bumped into a man who seemed to be looking for someone, he was also interested in jackie, i asked him "so your also interested in Jackie?", as he looked up, his hair flinged up, i instantly knew it was Peter. He tells me "yeah, i think she's in danger", as i thought about what he said, i heard someone's thoughts saying "power, all i want is your power cheerleader". i ran to find that voice, i knew it was Sylar who was wanting it, by the time i got there, i found a body lieing there, i saw jackie's head cut off but her brain was still intact, i saw with my detective trait that this wasn't the girl Sylar wanted so i walked around scanning everything, i saw some of the locker doors thrown off there hinges and were lying on the floor.
I walked outside feeling like a failure, i failed Hiro, i failed Peter and most of all i failed New York, i felt like killing myself until i heard a big crashing noise, i ran to investigate and that's when i saw Peter and this man in a cap lying on the floor together, blood was everywhere so i went to check on them, i helped the man with the cap but as i helped him he ran to the bushs and hid away, i went to check on Peter but i felt no pulse, i couldn't believe it, he was so strong in the future, he couldn't have died, i sobbed and left feeling useless, i saw Robert in the car, he came over and told me "sorry Rowan, i couldn't find her, i replied "i hope she survived, Peter was there, he gave his life up to save the world".
I jumped in the car and Robert drove off to New York to save Issac Mendez, i made a promise that i wouldn't let Issac die so we drove off hoping Issac was alive. As we were driving back to New York, we saw a couple of guys carrying a man into a van which was labelled Primatech papers, i remembered that they captured me and locked me up so i went to check what was going on, i walked up and asked them "hello there, i was wondering if you know how to get to New York from here?", they both looked at me, thinking i was stupid but i didn't care, i tried to read the bold man's mind but it was justa a static noise. The girl tells me "you just keep driving up the road along here and about four hours you'll be there", i told her "thanks and your name my lady" and she said "Eden Mccain and this is the Haitian", i knew it was that man who wiped my memories but kept my anger under control, i waved and walked back to the car and told Robert to drive.
As we got closer and closer to New York, i wanted to have a pit stop so we could regain our stamina, we stopped at a hotel and got a room, we both lied down for awhile but i felt thirsty and compelled myself to go outside and get a drink. I went to the diner next door and got a coke, as i drank this my eyes saw a familiar face, i looked at her and i knew instantly it was Sara who was here, i walked up and said in a nervous tone "Sara?", she turned her head and said "Rowan, is that you?", i nodded and she smiled. I sat down and looked at her, she turned red and smiled happily, i asked her "what are you doing here, Sara?", she tells me "i'm on vacation" and drinks her juice, i was shocked that fate has brought us here to this hotel together, i drank the rest of the coke and asked Sara if she wanted to walk with me, she happily replied a yes and we left the diner.
Sara was on the room right next door to ours, i told her good night and she said the same and went to our rooms, i felt like i didn't want to drag her down to my mission but i knew she would follow me to New York, Robert already asleep, snors loudly so i couldn't sleep so i went to Sara and knocked on her door, she opens and blushes, i go "can i sleep here tonight, Robert's snoring is killing me", she nodds and i walk inside, Sara looks at me and asks "Rowan, yo and em have been friends for years and it's time for you to know the truth!!", i look at her and didn't know what to say so i froze and listened, she continued "i can do something that nobody else can do", suddenly she makes a duplicate of herself right next to her and said "Rowan, i can clone myself, please say something" and with that i show her my fire, she smiles and suddenly she kisses me.
To be continued..
Sara kisses Rowan, what a shocker, what effect will this have on the relationship and his mission, find out on chapter nine "Rowan and Sara"
chapter eight
"homecoming"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"Rowan, you know you were going to kill a lot of people just then"
"i will save you New York"
Union wells high, Odessa Texas, USA
As we approached Union wells high, i felt like we saved the world, it was 8:08pm and it was homecoming. i looked everywhere for her but found no clue so i went inside to see if she was getting dressed for the prom or a dance, i ran until i saw a cabinet of pictures saying a girl named jackie ran in the fire and saved a man but Hiro told me Claire could heal so i knew it was wrong.
As i checked the area i bumped into a man who seemed to be looking for someone, he was also interested in jackie, i asked him "so your also interested in Jackie?", as he looked up, his hair flinged up, i instantly knew it was Peter. He tells me "yeah, i think she's in danger", as i thought about what he said, i heard someone's thoughts saying "power, all i want is your power cheerleader". i ran to find that voice, i knew it was Sylar who was wanting it, by the time i got there, i found a body lieing there, i saw jackie's head cut off but her brain was still intact, i saw with my detective trait that this wasn't the girl Sylar wanted so i walked around scanning everything, i saw some of the locker doors thrown off there hinges and were lying on the floor.
I walked outside feeling like a failure, i failed Hiro, i failed Peter and most of all i failed New York, i felt like killing myself until i heard a big crashing noise, i ran to investigate and that's when i saw Peter and this man in a cap lying on the floor together, blood was everywhere so i went to check on them, i helped the man with the cap but as i helped him he ran to the bushs and hid away, i went to check on Peter but i felt no pulse, i couldn't believe it, he was so strong in the future, he couldn't have died, i sobbed and left feeling useless, i saw Robert in the car, he came over and told me "sorry Rowan, i couldn't find her, i replied "i hope she survived, Peter was there, he gave his life up to save the world".
I jumped in the car and Robert drove off to New York to save Issac Mendez, i made a promise that i wouldn't let Issac die so we drove off hoping Issac was alive. As we were driving back to New York, we saw a couple of guys carrying a man into a van which was labelled Primatech papers, i remembered that they captured me and locked me up so i went to check what was going on, i walked up and asked them "hello there, i was wondering if you know how to get to New York from here?", they both looked at me, thinking i was stupid but i didn't care, i tried to read the bold man's mind but it was justa a static noise. The girl tells me "you just keep driving up the road along here and about four hours you'll be there", i told her "thanks and your name my lady" and she said "Eden Mccain and this is the Haitian", i knew it was that man who wiped my memories but kept my anger under control, i waved and walked back to the car and told Robert to drive.
As we got closer and closer to New York, i wanted to have a pit stop so we could regain our stamina, we stopped at a hotel and got a room, we both lied down for awhile but i felt thirsty and compelled myself to go outside and get a drink. I went to the diner next door and got a coke, as i drank this my eyes saw a familiar face, i looked at her and i knew instantly it was Sara who was here, i walked up and said in a nervous tone "Sara?", she turned her head and said "Rowan, is that you?", i nodded and she smiled. I sat down and looked at her, she turned red and smiled happily, i asked her "what are you doing here, Sara?", she tells me "i'm on vacation" and drinks her juice, i was shocked that fate has brought us here to this hotel together, i drank the rest of the coke and asked Sara if she wanted to walk with me, she happily replied a yes and we left the diner.
Sara was on the room right next door to ours, i told her good night and she said the same and went to our rooms, i felt like i didn't want to drag her down to my mission but i knew she would follow me to New York, Robert already asleep, snors loudly so i couldn't sleep so i went to Sara and knocked on her door, she opens and blushes, i go "can i sleep here tonight, Robert's snoring is killing me", she nodds and i walk inside, Sara looks at me and asks "Rowan, yo and em have been friends for years and it's time for you to know the truth!!", i look at her and didn't know what to say so i froze and listened, she continued "i can do something that nobody else can do", suddenly she makes a duplicate of herself right next to her and said "Rowan, i can clone myself, please say something" and with that i show her my fire, she smiles and suddenly she kisses me.
To be continued..
Sara kisses Rowan, what a shocker, what effect will this have on the relationship and his mission, find out on chapter nine "Rowan and Sara"
You really need an editor. :/
PM me your next installment before you post it.
The story does have a lot of potential, but it's kind of hard to read.
PM me your next installment before you post it.
The story does have a lot of potential, but it's kind of hard to read.
Heroes fan fiction
chapter nine
"Rowan and Sara"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"what are you doing here, Sara?"
"Rowan, i can clone myself!!"
Diner, somewhere in New York USA
I felt her soft lips touch mine as she kissed me, i didn't know how to react to the situation so i went with it, kissing her back and continued for a while. After a long passionate kiss, Sara giggles as she looks at me, i looked at her but felt differently about her, i saw her not as a friend but someone more important and could tell her anything even my mission, so i tell her "Sara, the reason i'm on this trip is not for vacation but for a mission", Sara analyzing the words, not fully knowing what it meant asks "so what is the mission?", I told her all about Peter, Hiro and about New York, at first, she didn't believe me but she saw that i wasn't lying and trusted me. I walked out of her room and told her to wake up at seven in the morning, she nodds and says good night, i walk back in my room only to find the irritating sound Robert was making from sleeping.
I got up early and knocked on Sara's door, she opened and smiles at me, i told Robert to get the car ready and he did, he saw Sara and worried about bring her to the mission due to the severity of it but i ignored it and brought her along. Now only 20 minutes from Issac's place, we drove quickly so Sylar wouldn't kill him and destroy the future, we got there and saw his place, we knocked but the door was already opened, i was worried Sylar was already there so i armed myself with fire for attack, as we walked inside, it was full of drawings and pictures of events that have happened or have yet to happened, i saw Issac lying on the floor with a needle beside him, i instantly knew he was taking drugs so i tried to wake him up but he was in a trance. I was worried he had a drug overdose but as i said this he jumped up and coughed heavily, i ran next to him and asked "are you okay?", he replies "we have to stop it" in a weak tone, i asked "what does that mean?", and he said "the bomb, we have to stop it" and with that collapses back on the floor.
I was angry, we were going nowhere with this mission, the cheerleader Claire was dead and now Issac gave us no answers, Robert helps Issac up to the bed and lets him rest, he comes to me and tells me "what are we going to do now, Rowan?", i looked at the paintings and saw a reflection of the ground, i looked in terror and saw New York exploding, that's what Issac was trying to tell me, the painting on the floor. I ran outside and took a deep breath, Robert and Sara approached me and wondered if they could help but couldn't, i walked around thinking and suddenly thought of the idea, i told Robert and Sara to keep a look out for Sylar, they nodded and i ran towards Issac, i grabbed his hand and got paint then suddenly i was painting and painting on the canvas.
Robert and Sara walked to me and tried to wake me up but i was in trance and painting the future, after a while in trance, i broke out and saw what i painted, i saw Sylar attacking a amn who could melt metal objects, i was worried, worried that Sylar was getting too strong for me, Sara pat me on the should and said "don't worry Rowan, it will be alright", i looked at her and smiled. i looked outside and saw a shadow come in, it had a gun and then suddenly two more shadows walked besides him and said "Rowan, we are here for you!!".
To be continued..
Who are the shadows, are they powerful?, find out next on chapter ten "shadows of the company"
Heroes fan fiction
chapter ten
"shadows of the company"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"the bomb we have to stop it"
"Rowan, we are here for you!!"
Issac's loft, New York USA
The shadows suddenly walked closer towards us, i got nervous so i started my flames from my hands, i started to shoot it but it stopped, i saw that my powers weren't working, i knew it was the haitian stopping my powers. Robert tried to use telekinesis but his powers weren't working either so i looked at the haitian, staring at him, he started to sweat then stumble, i started to bleed from the ears but it was someone else attacking me, i looked on the side of me and saw a man who was sliently whistling, i started to fall but my powers were keeping me awake, i felt like i was falling asleep so i stared at the haitian, managing to knock him out and i ran up and grabbed the whistling man and threw him to the wall. i saw only one shadow remaining and he had the gun, i threw him with telekinesis but he got back up straight away, he shot at us but missed, i told Robert and Sara to go, they nodded and ran out the door, i ran up to the man and saw his face, the man was no other than Noah Bennett. He started to get up and i stepped back, he raises the gun at me, ready to fire but doesn't, he tells me that the bomb will be at kirby plaza in a weeks time, he said that i had to stop it and i promised him i would, he left with the other two and went back to they cars and drove off.
After a long run to catch up with Robert and Sara, i saw a girl crying and was being bullied by two other girls, i ran up and told the other girls to run off and don't come back, Robert and Sara came up and said "are you alright?", i told them it was good and they were pleased. i helped the girl up and she said thanks, that was enough heroics for one day and we went to find a hotel to stay for the night, i couldn't sleep so i went to have a walk, i walked past a guy who was trying to rob a lady of her purse so i went up to help, throwing the guy a hundred meters away, hitting a tree, he got up and jumped really high, i flew but he got me with a sticky substance that was holding me. i couldn't move so i used my fire, burning it off and attacked him, i flewat him and bang him into a tree and shocked him, he fell unconcious and i gave the lady her bag back, i walked back to my hotel room and open the door, my hands were stuck to the door and the same sticky slime from the man has now infected me, i thought that it must of been a new ability so i tried to control it and all the slime disappeared.
i woke up the next morning full of energy and felt that i could do anything, i could jump a thousand meters and fall safely to the ground, i enjoyed my new ability. i walk up to Robert and Sara, all tired and sleepy, i told them to hurry as i saw a twenty agents from primatech leap off they vans and suited up for a battle, i knew we would lose if we fought them because i saw the Haitian and Elle coming out of the van as well, i thought we had lost, we had nowhere to go and our powers weren't working, i said we are doomed until a burst of light came and sucked us in, it knocked us out and we were in for a ride.
When i came to, i saw a woman, sitting on a chair singing a song very familiar but yet so unknown, i got up and asked her "who are you and what have you done to us?", she turned her head and looked at me as if i was a child, i got mad and started my fire, she said "i'm here to help you", i looked at her stunned but yet angered by not understanding what has happened, she continues "i took you to the future, a week from where you were so you could stop the bomb, you are now in New York, one week in the future and here to stop the bomb, don't worry, your friends are in the back sleeping as well", i was processing the information which was a mess, i started to talk "so we are in the future, one week and exactly when the bomb is going to go off?", she nodds and i accepted her answer, i put on my jacket and woke the others up, i asked her "who are you and why did you help us?", she smiles and replies "i'm Chanelle and i'm your mother", my eyes opened wide and could not believe it but before i could speak to her, she vanished in a glow and i was left speechless. She must of wanted me to save the world and i will mum, i promise.
To be continued..
What has happened, Rowan's in the future and also met his mum, what will happen next, find out on chapter eleven and twelve "Kirby Plaza, fight to save the world"
chapter nine
"Rowan and Sara"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"what are you doing here, Sara?"
"Rowan, i can clone myself!!"
Diner, somewhere in New York USA
I felt her soft lips touch mine as she kissed me, i didn't know how to react to the situation so i went with it, kissing her back and continued for a while. After a long passionate kiss, Sara giggles as she looks at me, i looked at her but felt differently about her, i saw her not as a friend but someone more important and could tell her anything even my mission, so i tell her "Sara, the reason i'm on this trip is not for vacation but for a mission", Sara analyzing the words, not fully knowing what it meant asks "so what is the mission?", I told her all about Peter, Hiro and about New York, at first, she didn't believe me but she saw that i wasn't lying and trusted me. I walked out of her room and told her to wake up at seven in the morning, she nodds and says good night, i walk back in my room only to find the irritating sound Robert was making from sleeping.
I got up early and knocked on Sara's door, she opened and smiles at me, i told Robert to get the car ready and he did, he saw Sara and worried about bring her to the mission due to the severity of it but i ignored it and brought her along. Now only 20 minutes from Issac's place, we drove quickly so Sylar wouldn't kill him and destroy the future, we got there and saw his place, we knocked but the door was already opened, i was worried Sylar was already there so i armed myself with fire for attack, as we walked inside, it was full of drawings and pictures of events that have happened or have yet to happened, i saw Issac lying on the floor with a needle beside him, i instantly knew he was taking drugs so i tried to wake him up but he was in a trance. I was worried he had a drug overdose but as i said this he jumped up and coughed heavily, i ran next to him and asked "are you okay?", he replies "we have to stop it" in a weak tone, i asked "what does that mean?", and he said "the bomb, we have to stop it" and with that collapses back on the floor.
I was angry, we were going nowhere with this mission, the cheerleader Claire was dead and now Issac gave us no answers, Robert helps Issac up to the bed and lets him rest, he comes to me and tells me "what are we going to do now, Rowan?", i looked at the paintings and saw a reflection of the ground, i looked in terror and saw New York exploding, that's what Issac was trying to tell me, the painting on the floor. I ran outside and took a deep breath, Robert and Sara approached me and wondered if they could help but couldn't, i walked around thinking and suddenly thought of the idea, i told Robert and Sara to keep a look out for Sylar, they nodded and i ran towards Issac, i grabbed his hand and got paint then suddenly i was painting and painting on the canvas.
Robert and Sara walked to me and tried to wake me up but i was in trance and painting the future, after a while in trance, i broke out and saw what i painted, i saw Sylar attacking a amn who could melt metal objects, i was worried, worried that Sylar was getting too strong for me, Sara pat me on the should and said "don't worry Rowan, it will be alright", i looked at her and smiled. i looked outside and saw a shadow come in, it had a gun and then suddenly two more shadows walked besides him and said "Rowan, we are here for you!!".
To be continued..
Who are the shadows, are they powerful?, find out next on chapter ten "shadows of the company"
Heroes fan fiction
chapter ten
"shadows of the company"
previously on Heroes fan fiction
"the bomb we have to stop it"
"Rowan, we are here for you!!"
Issac's loft, New York USA
The shadows suddenly walked closer towards us, i got nervous so i started my flames from my hands, i started to shoot it but it stopped, i saw that my powers weren't working, i knew it was the haitian stopping my powers. Robert tried to use telekinesis but his powers weren't working either so i looked at the haitian, staring at him, he started to sweat then stumble, i started to bleed from the ears but it was someone else attacking me, i looked on the side of me and saw a man who was sliently whistling, i started to fall but my powers were keeping me awake, i felt like i was falling asleep so i stared at the haitian, managing to knock him out and i ran up and grabbed the whistling man and threw him to the wall. i saw only one shadow remaining and he had the gun, i threw him with telekinesis but he got back up straight away, he shot at us but missed, i told Robert and Sara to go, they nodded and ran out the door, i ran up to the man and saw his face, the man was no other than Noah Bennett. He started to get up and i stepped back, he raises the gun at me, ready to fire but doesn't, he tells me that the bomb will be at kirby plaza in a weeks time, he said that i had to stop it and i promised him i would, he left with the other two and went back to they cars and drove off.
After a long run to catch up with Robert and Sara, i saw a girl crying and was being bullied by two other girls, i ran up and told the other girls to run off and don't come back, Robert and Sara came up and said "are you alright?", i told them it was good and they were pleased. i helped the girl up and she said thanks, that was enough heroics for one day and we went to find a hotel to stay for the night, i couldn't sleep so i went to have a walk, i walked past a guy who was trying to rob a lady of her purse so i went up to help, throwing the guy a hundred meters away, hitting a tree, he got up and jumped really high, i flew but he got me with a sticky substance that was holding me. i couldn't move so i used my fire, burning it off and attacked him, i flewat him and bang him into a tree and shocked him, he fell unconcious and i gave the lady her bag back, i walked back to my hotel room and open the door, my hands were stuck to the door and the same sticky slime from the man has now infected me, i thought that it must of been a new ability so i tried to control it and all the slime disappeared.
i woke up the next morning full of energy and felt that i could do anything, i could jump a thousand meters and fall safely to the ground, i enjoyed my new ability. i walk up to Robert and Sara, all tired and sleepy, i told them to hurry as i saw a twenty agents from primatech leap off they vans and suited up for a battle, i knew we would lose if we fought them because i saw the Haitian and Elle coming out of the van as well, i thought we had lost, we had nowhere to go and our powers weren't working, i said we are doomed until a burst of light came and sucked us in, it knocked us out and we were in for a ride.
When i came to, i saw a woman, sitting on a chair singing a song very familiar but yet so unknown, i got up and asked her "who are you and what have you done to us?", she turned her head and looked at me as if i was a child, i got mad and started my fire, she said "i'm here to help you", i looked at her stunned but yet angered by not understanding what has happened, she continues "i took you to the future, a week from where you were so you could stop the bomb, you are now in New York, one week in the future and here to stop the bomb, don't worry, your friends are in the back sleeping as well", i was processing the information which was a mess, i started to talk "so we are in the future, one week and exactly when the bomb is going to go off?", she nodds and i accepted her answer, i put on my jacket and woke the others up, i asked her "who are you and why did you help us?", she smiles and replies "i'm Chanelle and i'm your mother", my eyes opened wide and could not believe it but before i could speak to her, she vanished in a glow and i was left speechless. She must of wanted me to save the world and i will mum, i promise.
To be continued..
What has happened, Rowan's in the future and also met his mum, what will happen next, find out on chapter eleven and twelve "Kirby Plaza, fight to save the world"
It's "I" not "i"! Biiiiiiiiiiiiiig mistake...my english teacher gives us lower marks because of that..It's hard to read...when I'm writing my FF I'm trying to write it without any mistake...sorry but this is horrible...I will not read it..find BR
Your i's need to be capitalised. Commas have different grammar rules than periods. Also, your verb tenses jump all over the place. I'm assuming you want it written in the present tense, but there's a lot of past tense verbs in there.
What you wrote:
What it should look like:
I got up early and knocked on Sara's door. She opens and smiles at me. I tell Robert to get the car ready and he does. He sees Sara and worries about bringing her to the mission due to its severity, but I ignore him and bring her along.
Now only 20 minutes from Isaac's place, we drive quickly so Sylar won't be able to kill him and destroy the future. We get there and see his place. We knock, but the door is already open. I worry that Sylar is already there, so I arm myself with fire for attack. As we walk inside, we see that the apartment is full of drawings and pictures of events that happened or have yet to happen. I see Isaac lying on the floor with a needle beside him. I instantly know that he was taking drugs, so I try to wake him, but he is in a trance. I worry aloud that he will have a drug overdose, but just as I say this, he jumps up and coughs heavily. I run next to him and ask,
"Are you okay?"
"We have to stop it," he replies in a weak tone.
"What does that mean?" I asked.
"The bomb--we have to stop it." And with that, he collapses back on the floor.
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Aside from all of the bolded red marks, do you see how much easier that reads? It really isn't a horrible story -- it's just kind of hard to get through because my mind keeps picking up on all the grammatical issues.
Please PM me your drafts so I can edit them.
What you wrote:
QUOTE
I got up early and knocked on Sara's door, she opened and smiles at me, i told Robert to get the car ready and he did, he saw Sara and worried about bring her to the mission due to the severity of it but i ignored it and brought her along. Now only 20 minutes from Issac's place, we drove quickly so Sylar wouldn't kill him and destroy the future, we got there and saw his place, we knocked but the door was already opened, i was worried Sylar was already there so i armed myself with fire for attack, as we walked inside, it was full of drawings and pictures of events that have happened or have yet to happened, i saw Issac lying on the floor with a needle beside him, i instantly knew he was taking drugs so i tried to wake him up but he was in a trance. I was worried he had a drug overdose but as i said this he jumped up and coughed heavily, i ran next to him and asked "are you okay?", he replies "we have to stop it" in a weak tone, i asked "what does that mean?", and he said "the bomb, we have to stop it" and with that collapses back on the floor.
What it should look like:
I got up early and knocked on Sara's door. She opens and smiles at me. I tell Robert to get the car ready and he does. He sees Sara and worries about bringing her to the mission due to its severity, but I ignore him and bring her along.
Now only 20 minutes from Isaac's place, we drive quickly so Sylar won't be able to kill him and destroy the future. We get there and see his place. We knock, but the door is already open. I worry that Sylar is already there, so I arm myself with fire for attack. As we walk inside, we see that the apartment is full of drawings and pictures of events that happened or have yet to happen. I see Isaac lying on the floor with a needle beside him. I instantly know that he was taking drugs, so I try to wake him, but he is in a trance. I worry aloud that he will have a drug overdose, but just as I say this, he jumps up and coughs heavily. I run next to him and ask,
"Are you okay?"
"We have to stop it," he replies in a weak tone.
"What does that mean?" I asked.
"The bomb--we have to stop it." And with that, he collapses back on the floor.
-----
Aside from all of the bolded red marks, do you see how much easier that reads? It really isn't a horrible story -- it's just kind of hard to get through because my mind keeps picking up on all the grammatical issues.
Please PM me your drafts so I can edit them.
I didn't say that the story is horrible...just the writing...like you said "t's just kind of hard to get through because my mind keeps picking up on all the grammatical issues."
QUOTE (MrHalliwell @ Apr 3 2009, 12:52 PM) 
I didn't say that the story is horrible...
Oh, I know. I wasn't referring to that at all. I was trying to say that horrible writing doesn't necessarily mean that the story is bad. You can have a really good story and bad writing. That's what editors are for.
it's a good story but watch out for errors
other than that it was great and keep posting
other than that it was great and keep posting
good story, i like how you try to introduce new powers each time and how you try and make suspense,
Keep writing and if you need a beta reader, i can help.
Keep writing and if you need a beta reader, i can help.
love this story, keep posting
great story, keep it up
and syelle1, you stole my name!
and syelle1, you stole my name!
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