A Fanfic about my Factions character and how he joined the faction Unity.
Theodore @ HeroesWiki
Theodore @ Heroes Survival
**note this is my first fanfic and I apoligise for eventual grammatical errors.
*** Fully updated.



"Leave us alone, just go away..."
How did I ever come to this point, here we where in the middle of the woods, late at night, rain running down my neck, mud covering my face.
I guess it all started after the horrible events with this American Agency under the guise of 'Building 26'...


Theodore to Unity


I just don't believe that Building 26 had any juristiction in Europe, I heard they even captured some Japanese guys.."

There I was speaking to another ex-prisoner from building 26, we where sitting on a bench, in a park, God knows where in the US.
".. I mean doesn't it bring some legal repercussions with the whole fiasco?"
After a short pause, Jon answered in his usual absent minded way
"Maybe they've been working together all this time."

I could've guessed he'd say something like that.
Jon was my about my age, 20 so years old, not much taller than me, athleticly build, sleek and short black hair, a full face and eyes that seemed to shine kindness with a brown hue. He was from France, he looked as if he could be one of the Beatles.

"Well it's not anything I'd like to get involved with, now I just want to go home.
Speaking of which, I think I'll be going home anytime now, I mean if you'd be so kind."
"Netherlands here we come" Jon said.



Jon could teleport, he found out when he was thirteen. He was just riding his bike to school when a truck was going to hit him, next thing he knew he was standing on the sidewalk looking at his bike being crushed by the sheer force and magnitude of the impact,
he'd never ride a bike again.



With time he learned to control his ability, I guess to many people knew about it because he went everywhere using his ability.
I think it's cool, endless possibilities, always able to go anywhere you'd like, but I'd keep it hidden. Especially knowing what I know now.

"Sure it'll be my pleasure."
Nothing more nor less, that's Jon for ya, he'd never say something that wasn't worth saying.



Rest, after all that time I'm finally able to get some real rest. Not the semi-comatose condition we where put in at 'building 26'. It seems like ages since I've had some proper sleep.

Anywho, it's on to the next issue at hand, I've been gone for two months, my family wants to know what happened, where I've been, how I got back and who this Jon fellow is.
I've got it all planned out I'll tell them I've been to Italy to check out a school, nothing remarkable happened, I met Jon there, he showed me around because he'd lived there for a while now.
I invited him to stay with us for a couple of days and so we flew back from Italy.

Before I know it my mom's got a party planned for my 'miraculous' return, of course she didn't tell me about it, she wanted it to be a suprise.
And so after a good nights rest, more like a solid three days, I woke to the sound of people talking, a lot of people talking.
I cleaned myself up for a bit and just then I first glimpsed the weary expression on the face in the mirror. Rugged brown hair, unshaven face, deep grey-green eyes and a sense of unfamiliarity.



Suddenly Jon opened the bathroom door.
"It seems you've been missed. There are a lot of people waiting for you downstairs.
Even some foreigners. I had no idea you knew this many people." He said with a smirk on his face.
"I guess that makes two of us.
Jon, not a word about what really happened down there."
"My lips are sealed Teddy." Jon was the only one who ever called me Teddy and when he did I knew he was hiding something. He told someone or he was told not to speak about something.
A suprise maybe, probably, but what kind?

I got down. There stood everyone I knew, both my parents, how they pulled that one of I still don't get, brothers an girlfriends respectively, cousins, uncles and aunts, friends. All but the person I was hoping for the most; my best friend.


As I learned later he couldn't be reached, actually it was like this for a long time. It just got worse when he got a girlfriend. We drifted apart but he'll always be my best friend.


I told people where I'd 'been' and they accepted and understood it.
As it was getting later in the day people started going home asking if I'd come by any day soon. I would say something like; "The Devil couldn't keep me away."

Eventually my mom got up and said she had a suprise for me. She left the room and came back again, not alone, far from it.


I didn't think I'd ever see her ever again.
Elsa, some sort of natural high encloses me, of all the girls in all the world she had to be the one that moves my very foundation.
Honeybrown hair tied back into a ponytail, bangs covering her forehead, eyes as grey and deep as the sea, lips with a certain fineness enclosing a mouth which seemed to move anyone to a hearty smile.

The one thing I remember vividly about my comatose state at 'building 26' where the dreams, only dreams about her and me in a field one time, deep in the sea the other time.
I'd have to say she's the reason I came back, but I could've never guessed she would actually be here.
She's from France and, as she told me, my mom invited her to stay with us for a couple of days, maybe even a full week.

She looks at me, somewhat awestruck I look back at her, and then before I know it she's buried herself in my arms.
I didn't know she cared that much about me. We just stand there for a while, not saying anything, everyone leaves the room except for Jon who in his turn gets janked out of the room.
We laugh at this and then it turnes somewhat serious.

She asks why I didn't let her know, and I clumsily reply that I didn't want anyone to know so that no one would come after me, this I say after apoligizing of course. We talked a lot that evening, without interruptions. I guess my family gets how much she means to me.

After everyone left I just wanted to sleep in a nice warm bed again. There is a certain amount of weariness my body can handle but it seems I'm not quite over it yet.
After saying good night to Elsa, I went into my room and got into my bed immediatly.

I fall asleep almost instantly, but dreams about the chase and capture haunt me and soon I wake in my cold sweat.
I find Elsa beside me, she seemed to get in bed with me after I fell asleep. She askes what's wrong. I reply saying I just had a bad dream, nothing to worry about.

Finally everything seems to be going my way.



After a few days Jon went home again, he said he had some things to take care of for himself.

"Now don't do something stupid like telling that poor girl what actually happened, ok?" He said.
"You've got a lot of nerve caling her a poor girl." I joked.
"You've seen how happy she is, or have your eyes gone blind Jon?"

We said our goodbyes and promised to meet sometime soon again. There aren't many people who I could confide in but he, Jon, was one of them. He never told me about his family or friends, but he aught to be missed, he's a great guy.
I couldn't have pulled this of without him.
If not for him I'd still be in America, trying to find a way back home. Or perhaps trying to get a new life.

In these days Elsa and I got a lot closer, we walked and talked a lot, about our pasts, hopes and dreams but it was made painfully clear that she had to get back home to France in a few days, her brother called often to ask where he had to go, to tell her when she'd be picked up and to make sure I didn't harm her.
She would've liked to stay for a longer time than this week only and so she told me so many personal things, including her annoyance for her brother at this time, because he was so overprotective of her. She told me that her father had died when she was very young and ever since her brother had been some sort of fatherly figure for her, but she could take care of her own now.


At this time she had told me so much about herself that I couldn't keep my story from her anymore.
I had to tell her, she trusted me with her pains and past, so I had to tell her about my pains and past.


My running from the 'building 26' agents, being captured, being kept comatose, escaping, hiding, and being captured again.
She was shocked to hear such a thing but everything seemed to come together for her now.
The absence of the letters I used to send her, no more messages on her facebook account, and even no
more e-mails. While she thought I tried to cut her out of my life, I was being hunted, seeing her as only light in my life.

That day we went to the forest for the first time.
It was a beautiful lush and green pine forest with some lakes. It isn't to big, same thing for the whole country, but it is one of those places where time seems to stop and life's ugly questions can be seen trough pink glasses.

I showed her what I can do there, I can control plants, I can create plants, hell, I'm a walking botanical encyclopedia. My ability doesn't just stop there. I recently found out I'm immume for most diseases and that I heal at an accelerated rate, I can create and negate any biological poison and my body seems to be able to photosynthesise.
When I said create plants, I actually mean create new, never before seen plants, there was one thing I was constantly working on, a flower which could accompany Elsa's beauty.

When I told her first she wouldn't believe me, until she saw it with her own eyes. Next she was scared, but when I created these flowers for her she seemed delightened.
She accepted my ability fo what it was.

I knew that if I didn't do this now I'd always regret it, and so I kissed her.
At first she looked akward, but this passed quickly when she said she had been waiting for that kiss a long time now.
Looked like I caught her off guard.



The next day when we were walking in the forest again she was a bit hesitant to speak at all. I asked her if anything was wrong because she didn’t seem as cheerful as normal.
"I.." she started "My brother was 'involved' with the hunt on your people here in Europe."
I turned away from her, I pondered about what she said, and what she actually knew.
“I didn’t believe my brother at first, these abilities.. they sound like trouble but I know I can trust you, and I know that there must be more people with abilities like you than those of which my brother spoke.”
There was much wisdom in her words, perhaps more than I could comprehend at that time.



I turned back to her only to see Jon appearing behind her, he looked bad. Bleeding, suffering from a bullet wound or maybe more, I guess he'd been intercepted while porting back to France, or upon returning.
"I'm sorry.. Run.." he gasped.

Elsa, a bit startled came up to me instantly. I wanted to check up on Jon but it was too late he collapsed and we saw he had few gunshot wounds in his back.

Dear friend, thank you for everything. I whispered to him.

I couldn’t help but suspect Elsa’s brother and I asked her a bit agitated where her brother was operating at the time but she didn’t know.
I saw in her eyes that she was distressed, conflict was brewing inside her. On the one side there was the big brother she grew up with, who she could rely upon. On the other side there was this guy who she’d met a few years ago and who she fell in love with.


It was getting dark, thick clouds filled the sky, and the first drops of rain began to fall. There was a rumble, thunder lit the sky and the wind blew violently trough the forest.
The trees seemed to whisper me to get out of there.

We ran for shelter, after a few minutes we heard a gunshot.
Jon was dead, I felt it in my gut. And again I thought that I heard the trees except they wailed and seemed to lament, a slow low pitched tone.
Elsa, startled by the gunshot sound froze up. I knew about a Bird-spotting shed somewhere along the path and carried her there. I laid her down on a bench inside the shed and went outside.

Closing the door I was facing someone vaguely familiar, he pointed a gun at me and said something French.
I ran, away from the shed, I needed to get him as far as possible from the shed, from Elsa. It worked, he came after me but after a stride or so another one jumped in front of me and shot me with a tasergun. Reacting on instinct vines grew along my legs to redirect the electricity to the ground.
With some other vines I bound the new pursuer to the ground, turned and ran back towards the shed.



It happened to fast, a bullet hit my shoulder and I fell with my face in the mud. I tried to stand up but he shot me again, in the leg this time. I created a botanical sedative so I wouldn't feel the pain. I hit him away with some branches only to see Elsa standing a few feet away from me. She ran into my arms and I held her.
This moment, this one moment. All what anyone wants in this one moment of tranquility.
Then I open my eyes and look into the barrel of a gun, he points it downwards at Elsa’s back.
I look into his eyes and see he wouldn’t hesitate to pull the trigger.
“Trust me” I whisper to Elsa.
I hold her and make a 180 turn and see her puzzled look shift to a look of horror.


A sharp pain enters my back, two other soon follow. My last reflex seems to shoot roots and vines from the ground into the pursuers’ body.
These where my thoughts but it happened before I could even see it happen.
"NOO!" Elsa screamed.
She held me when I fell onto the ground. I said I’d be fine, or at least I thought I said it. After a moment I stood up with her help and we went to look at the body, he was still breathing.


I looked at Elsa, her face was as pale as the moon in a clear winter night. It was her brother, coming to pick her up. She rushed to him and held him.
They had perceived Jon as a threat and shot him. They didn't know about me or what I could do.
"Stay away from us."
"I can help, let me.."

"Stay away, you almost killed him."
"They killed Jon.. And how could I've known he was your brother?"

"I could've expect it from my brother, but you.. I never thought you would be capable to do something like this. "
"I.. You don't know what it's like to be hunted for this long, if you don't.. I.. I'm Sorry."

"Leave us alone, just go away..."
"No I'm responsible for this, I have to repent."

"If they find them you'll be locked up again, There'll always be those who hunt us. Go."
"Us.. What about you?"

"I can take care of myself."
"I.. I love you, I've always loved you."


At this she looked at me with tears in her eyes, and I knew then that she'd felt the same for a long time, but I also knew I'd probably never see her again. She told me to run, not because she was angry about her brother, but because she wanted me to be free, and because she loved me. So I ran.



When I came home I got a bag and put some clothes in it. I saw my laptop and noticed someone had made a text message;
"Yo Teddy, you might wanna check this out."
A hyperlink leading to a Videofeed. I checked it out, Jon seemed to think it was of some importance. Most of it didn't even make sense to me right now, I'd lost my friend and the girl of my dreams. I had to get out of here again as fast as possible.
“...happen to be watching over the internet, Chloe will be checking for text messages and e-mails you send to the number and address we provided for you...”


I guess I should send them my story and ask if I could join this group 'Unity', they ought to be able to help.


I guess I'm back being a Fugitive..

I always tell the truth when it comes to stories I've read, and this time is going to be no different, lol.

First off, the good stuff. I liked the story and the overall plot to it. It sets up your character very well and makes me very intrigued to hear more of what you've got for him. It's a sad story, but those are the best most of the time anyways, haha. I like this, overall. Good use of my story as well at the end. Fit together very well!

Now, the bad stuff... the story felt rushed. It was just one thing after the other and there was never any time to think about what I had just read. Also, there's very little to no description of what's going on. As a reader, I can guess what's happened and piece it all together, but I shouldn't necessarily have to do that. Also, the story itself was very jumbled up. It wasn't very neat. I'm talking about the actual placement of the words and the lack of spaces, etc. Try using the enter key more and make everything orderly.

As for the grammar problems you said might be in the story, I didn't really see too much. It was understandable really, and I didn't see any misspelled words or bad sentences, etc. You just need to work on your writing really. Practice and all that.

Don't take any of this the wrong way though. This is all constructive criticism for you, a way for you to build on what you're already doing. You've got promise, you just need to practice.

First of all thanks for the critisism.
I know it could need some work to it, it'll probably be more of a rough outline than an actual story so far.
So yeah I know how to improve it, and this'll probably take a while longer. When I've Improved a piece I'll post it in this topic until the story seems more compotent than it is right now.

*** Every now and then I'll update the story with refinements these parts will be between ----- stripes.


extra note; 2nd draft is now ready